Awe by Alexis

A slow drizzle left raindrops tapping the hospital window. The wall clock ticked quietly, seeming to understand the tenderness of these moments. Yet to him, time had ceased long ago. There was no one in the world but he, and her.
The sweet scent of new life enthralled his senses as he caressed his child. His heart beat briskly as he held her warm fingers. A surge of emotion pulsed through him, and his lips brushed her dainty, round nose. Each of her breaths minded its fragile bearings; her chest remained nearly motionless.
Awed into silence, he watched her sleep. How mocha-colored curls swept across her forehead, or the tiny fingers wrapped tightly around his own, he did not know. Through the momentary crying after birth, he saw the fine resemblance of her eyes to his own, and the faint dimples of her mother. How a man’s love for his wife could manifest such a person was breathtaking.
As he continued to gaze upon her, she began stirring. He adjusted his hold and rocked her, humming a lullaby. A smile flickered upon her face. It snatched his breath away. He could not help thinking that smile was for him.


Posted on February 28, 2014, in Student Writing. Bookmark the permalink. 9 Comments.

  1. This is awesome! Great job! πŸ™‚

  2. Alexis, this is BEAUTIFUL!!!!! I LOVE it!!!!!

  3. Thanks, Hannah and Megan!

  4. Wow. Amazing. Beautiful. I…it…it’s AMAZING. AWESOMESAUCE. AMAZINGDOODLES. -insert another exclamation of joy-

  5. Wow, this is so good πŸ™‚ I can picture the dad’s expression and the daughter perfectly! Great job!

  6. Thanks, aviline and Emily!

    @aviline — Amazeballs? πŸ˜‰

    @Emily — That’s what I was going for! Glad you enjoyed it!

    • Haha. You can add a lot of things to the end of awesome and amazing and make it sound pretty awesomedoodles! Yeah…no clue if awesomedoodles works…

  7. That is how my dad said he felt and acted when he first saw me. Great job, I could use some help with my writing.

    • That’s really cool, Giovanni! πŸ™‚ Maybe I’ll do a few “writing tips” posts in the future. πŸ™‚

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