NAPOWRIMO Day #12

Today’s prompt:

Write a triquint about a loss

Post your poem to comments!

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Posted on April 12, 2018, in NaPoWriMo. Bookmark the permalink. 38 Comments.

  1. I would just like to say that I think this is bad, but I’m proud of my symbolism
    —————————————————————————————————————————-
    Please let me be wrong, I hope you’re lying
    Deep down, I know I’m dreaming
    A knife to the heart
    Crumbling
    Grief

    I miss you so, the wound is still raw
    I still expect to see you
    A knife to the heart
    Crumbling
    Lying

    I even miss your stupid jokes
    So stupid, they were funny
    A knife to the heart
    Crumbling
    Bye

  2. Okay, it’s not good, but here’s my first ever triquint

    You left me in the dead of the night
    Gone forever, I do fright
    This pain is too much
    Need your touch
    Gone

    Return to me, my secret lover
    Over me, your lips hover
    This pain is too much
    Need your touch
    None

    I see now, I need to do as you
    And flee from this darkened hue
    This pain is too much
    Need your touch
    Run

  3. Hi Maryssa and Sofia, I love your poems! Marysa, are you still sick with salomella?

  4. Okay, Here I go.

    My dearest love, you hold my heart.
    it pains me to be apart,
    from you too, but
    they say you
    have died.
    i.

    How can it be true, that you dead?
    would not I have felt it?
    My love grows
    every day.
    love.

    Come back to me! Why have you left?
    Why did you meet your death?
    your words, your touch,
    I miss the and you.
    My dear one. My friend.
    You.

    I have never done this before and frankly am not quite sure a triquint is. I probably should have looked it up first. πŸ™‚ But there is a first time for everything and if you don’t do it, how will you learn it?

    • That’s why I chose this prompt for y’all! I want y’all to learn new poetry forms and try ones you’ve never done before to broaden your knowledge (there’s dozens upon dozens of forms I never knew about until I started NaPoWriMo! It’s pretty cool!)
      Definitely make sure you look up the form before you write it, though πŸ˜› Well done, you did a great job! (the last three lines of each stanza were so beautifully placed, very clever and profound)

    • Really good job Alexa! I love how the last lines spell out I Love You! perfect touch to your poem!

    • Gabrielle Lovell

      Wow, I’m so so so sorry for your loss Alexa! 😦 ❀ This is wonderfully beautiful, I really love this. Amazingly relateable. πŸ™‚ ❀

  5. Though the day was happy, the night
    Brought words that gave me a fright.
    My world fell apart,
    It went dark.
    How?

    I was lost, scared; I felt my heart break.
    Three months go by; it still feels fake.
    My world fell apart,
    It went dark.
    Why?

    The days went by fast, blurs of pure pain.
    Thoughts of her stuck on my brain.
    My world fell apart,
    It went dark.
    How?

    • I love your questions! what, why and how!

    • Gabrielle Lovell

      Woah, this is so deep and so beautiful! I love the depth and the meaning, my favorite parts are the ‘how’ and ‘why’ at the end of each one. Really beautiful, I love it. ❀ πŸ™‚

  6. My Love, as delicate as a dove
    Our hands fit just like a glove
    But I let go of
    Who I loved.
    Why

    We had perfection written for us
    We would never have distrust
    But I let go of
    Who I loved.
    Fight

    Our love was eaten away like rust
    But we never made a fuss
    But I let go of
    Who I loved
    Died

  7. I somehow mixed this up with another prompt??? Oh well.
    ________________
    I
    More than ever
    Realize I deserve to live
    Not to take care of people, or
    To wallow in unending sadness and fear,
    But to live for myself
    I will be
    Better

  8. Falling apart at the seams
    I can’t keep screaming
    I’m trying so hard
    Just to breathe
    Gasping

    These dreams I’ve had
    Grasping at my brain
    Scratching my heart
    Tearing me apart
    Draining

    Searing pain leaving me blank
    Leaving me suffocated
    I wish I could change
    My soul has flaked
    Shattered

    ——————-
    As my first attempt I feel like it was pretty good lol πŸ˜›

  9. Gabrielle Lovell

    Hey there Sherrie
    I wish i could see
    What everybody
    Else did
    what
    did I
    miss

    You passed away a while ago
    Your family misses you so
    Your daughters having
    A beautiful baby girl
    I wish you were
    Here to see
    her

    I didn’t get to know you when you were sick
    You were ill or weeks, how did we miss it
    I wish I could hear you laugh more
    I wish I didn’t shut the door
    I didn’t have a choice
    Or even a voice
    I wish I didn’t
    Miss
    it

    Well, i guess this is goodbye
    Your family misses you
    and wishes you’re alive
    I want to see you
    To know you
    To value
    what I
    didn’t
    once
    know

    ——–
    Not very good, but wanted to dedicate this to my sort of aunt Sherrie who passed a wile ago and is dearly missed by my family. Her daughter is having a baby soon, and I know she would’ve wanted her mother and father there to see it. 😦 ❀ Comments are appreciated. πŸ™‚

    • Oh my, I am so sorry for your loss, Gabby. 😦 I hope everything gets better soon. Fantastic poem, and it is very good! Also, congrats on the baby! ❀

    • Oh my, I am so sorry for your loss, Gabby. 😦 I hope everything gets better soon.
      Fantastic poem, and it is very good Also, congrats on the baby! ❀

      • Gabrielle Lovell

        Thank you Sofi, I didn’t get to know her much but my family was super close to her. Thank you, my cousin is so happy and is having a little baby girl! I am so excited for her! πŸ˜€ ❀

      • Aw, I’m so glad! If I can ask, what is the baby’s name going to be?
        Fun fact, my mom instead of naming me Sofia was going to name me Gabrielle LOL πŸ˜‰
        You’re welcome!! ❀

      • Gabrielle Lovell

        Oops! Sorry for the late reply!!!The baby will be named Scarlett Rose, which rose is her middle name, which is my aunts middle name. πŸ™‚ Haha!!! That’s awesome! My name came from a girl my mom met when she worked at pre-k, and she said there was this beautiful little girl, that se loved, so she named me after her, which is kind of but really sweet I think. πŸ™‚ ❀

  10. Okay, I have never written a trinquint before, but here goes nothing!
    ———-
    Best friends, we were; yes
    I still miss you
    We were torn
    Apart, now
    Done

    Those merry times we had,
    Are done, totally over
    I think forlorn,
    Of us,
    Nostalgia

    I’ll never hear you laugh
    I’ll never see you
    Smile again lift
    Me up
    Over

    I need you here now
    Sadly I cannot do
    Anything now I
    Need you
    Here

    Lift my head up from despair
    Show me your face
    Show me your
    Flair Come
    Back

    I wasn’t popular you were
    That broke my heart
    Into a thousand
    Pieces Help
    Me

    I must face reality now
    We’re not friends enemies
    You’re with the
    Popular group,
    Alone

    I watch forlornly as you
    Change from me to
    Them I turn
    Around heading
    Away.

    I wish it wasn’t like
    This only you do
    You gossip about
    Me I
    Leave

    Time has come for me
    To change I find
    True friends and
    Stick with
    Them

    Now I know I honestly
    Really won’t truly
    Miss anything of
    The things;
    You
    ————
    This was super long everyone! I applaud if you made it all the way down here. Okay, this is based on losing a friend in 5th grade (last year) to the popular gang. It hurt a lot, but I finally found some real, true friends. I still have contact with them, but the one in the popular group started gossiping about me because I wore braids to school instead of the usual pony-tail, and trust me it’s a lot worse than it sounds. (In my school last year, you HAD to be with the trends, so you could leave the school ALIVE.) I’m glad I chose FLVS and found the support of CWC. ❀ I hope you enjoyed it! πŸ™‚

  11. Bridget Bishop

    Too young to know what was wrong.
    I only noticed the tears.
    Sadness took over.
    Never knew.
    Overlooked.

    Older, and understand this fate.
    Wish everything could disappear.
    I’d take your place.
    I pray.
    Goodbye.

    Death isn’t the only thing that we mourn and dread.
    We mourn those we’ve lost to bad judgment.
    We mourn “backstabbers” for a time.
    We mourn the “friend.”

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